all know, smoking has a great harm to people. Every year about 300 million people died desease that deprive from smoking. Smoking use much money every year. About 2000 million dollars.
We can see, smoking is so much harmness. So, we advocate all of people have't smoke.
In 1995, the tobacco consumption has 142 million pounds, much less that in 1994. Because many people of smoking already think the smoking has no advantage, only bring illness.
We hope all of the world, it is no people smoke in the future.
样题 8
On Smoking
In the whole world the tobacco consumption has being decrease. According to the figure given in the data, we can see tobacco consumption was about 143.64 billion pounds in 1994, and about 142 billion pounds in 1995. Why are there on the decrease?
I think there are two reasons. In the first place, smoking is do harm to people health. For example, it is may be responsible for lung cancer. There are about 300 thousand people died of smoking every year. Secondly, smoking cost a great deal. Every year money spend on smoking is about 200000000.
As a result, when people realize this, they begin to give up smoking.
But I must point out that smoker all over the world still account for 20%, about 11000000. So we must educate people give up smoking.
评语：样题 7和样题 8内容基本符合要求，语句尚可理解，但结构与用词错误多，有些是严重错误，数字表达错误，长度符合要求。得5分
样题 9
In wave of economic reform, more and more people have realize the damage of smoking. It is obvious. Smoking has not any benefit to man's health, but as is know to all, everything has two sides. The taxs of tobacco are main resource of nation finasal. So the government of all country have to permit the product of tobacco. According to the figure, we can see the sum production of tobacco very great, 143.64 billion pounds in 1994, 142 billion pounds in 1995. The number of smoking man is 20% during world population. Smoking damages not only human's body but also waste lot of money. For example, there are 2000 billion dollar spending in tobacco and 300 million people die in smoking.
I think the tendency of tobacco consumprion have be taken down. I should try my best to depress the damage of smoking.
样题 10
It is said that smoking do harm. I realy agree with it.
Everyone in world know that smoking is not good habit, at the same time, so many
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